Về Với Em - Mủa Thu

Về Với Em - Mủa Thu

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Sunset on Glacier Bay

English Version of  'Hoàng Hôn Trên Glacier Bay'

Sunset on Glacier Bay

Oh! The ocean

Where I see the ice mountain’s shadow playing with sunlight

Dancing on the waves in small, elegant steps

A vision of pinks and oranges with innumerable shades of subtly Magnificently entwined and released

On the silvery waves where the maiden’s form of distance passed

Is created by the curves & lines of ancient Greek goddesses

Nature's beauty has overflowed

And my eyes embrace all and everything they can reach

Until I close my eyes and I listen to my heartbeat

It quivers with the yearning of being embraced

Time stands still, here, now, at this moment

Oh! God of nature, mountains, and god of oceans

Here, my long and unworthy life I'd trade

For a pure ray of the light my hands long to reach

To be part of, to be dissolved in,

But retreating away, the golden light follows its waves,

And dives off into its depth

Yet still, thoughts in my heart linger,

with trembling and hesitancy in every grasping beat!

Nhật Thụy Vi

(Thanks Anastasia for helping with editing)

Hoàng Hôn Trên Glacier Bay

Ôi biển!

Kìa băng sơn và mặt trời chập chùng trên sóng

Ánh hào quang quyện khói nhạt cùng mây

Màu hồng cam ửng nước bạc đang trôi

Từng gợn sóng, mỹ miều đường cong mỹ nữ

Ta hấp tấp, ta xôn xao  bấu giữ

Thời gian ơi chỉ có một ngần này

Thần thiên nhiên, thần núi, thần mặt trời

Cho một phút, một giây này bất tử

Cho ta đổi một đời dài cằn cỗi

Nhận một áng hồng sắp sửa chìm sâu

Ôi! Nhưng sao lòng run rẫy xiết bao

Ta ngần ngại nên hồng chìm dưới  sóng.

Nhật Thụy Vi

June 2013

https://kimblekorner.wikispaces.com/Nhat+Thuy+Vi

Commentary by Kathy Ho 2/22/2015

This poem is about the brilliance and splendor of nature. The narrator is praising nature in all its glory, this one specifically, a sunset on Glacier Bay. To the narrator, every aspect of nature is alive from the mountain’s shadow playing with the sunlight of the setting sun to the waves who take the form of a woman whose beauty can only have been created by goddesses. It is unmistakable that the narrator is overwhelmed by the beauty of what they are witnessing and that the narrator is willing to be overtaken by this beauteous scene. They embrace the tremendous beauty of nature and submit to its awesome power. In the Vietnamese culture, nature has an immense influence on the people, with the ability to leave many afflated. There is so little opportunity to appreciate beauty in the world that when beauty is presented to you, you must appreciate it to the fullest extent. This is firmly expressed in Vi’s poem when she wrote that the moment of the sunset was immortal and forever erect. Also firmly expressed in the poem is the idea that the beauty of nature is immortal. Vi’s writes of how, even though the moment of the sunset is gone, the effect of the beauty they had just witnessed still lingers in their hearts and in every heartbeat. Vi is showing the entrapping ability of beauteous nature through this. This shows how beauty never escapes their heart and that they are willfully forever ensnared by its power.

"Sunset on Glacier Bay" Commentary - by Lauren

lauren0g Feb 22, 2015

This is an exceptionally charming poem that seems to flow very smoothly in both languages (although I'm taking a guess on the Vietnamese; will you read it to me sometime?). I feel as if you have grasped the nature of the poem very strongly, and I agree with several of your points. The detail provide by Vi is very beautiful, and her imagery paints a beautiful picture of the actual sunset on Glacier Bay in the first stanza, waiting until the last two lines to really bring it down to earth and focus on herself for a small sliver of this poem. The second stanza is a mix of the two, reflecting on her own self and the nature of what she wants to become: a beam of light, so potent and powerful, yet a single silk thread in this masterpiece of nature. Another notable element about this poem that I feel you missed is the fact that the poem itself has a steady but irregular beat to it, like the heart beat that the speaker of the poem mentioned. It adds a sort of trembling curiosity to the poem, like she is completely and totally overwhelmed by the beauty of nature in this scene, ensnaring her senses and feelings about this encounter with nature. These points are incredibly important, especially with the fact that the speaker is willing to give her whole being to become a piece of this slice of nature, leaving the reader with her sense of curiosity and wonder.

Commentary by Elizabeth Hwang

Elizabeth_Hwang Feb 22, 2015

I think it’s really amazing how you were able to do your poetry project using Vietnamese poems. Even though our poems are from different countries, I can still imagine that it was challenging to interpret the Vietnamese culture and figurative language. The “Scars of War” used beautiful imagery and your explanation really clarified it. My favorite line is, “It would have stopped if each leaf in this vast

jungle hold those droplets of tears.” I further saw how the author felt when she shared the number of tears shed and how there were so many that all of the leaves would have to capture the droplets. She clearly shows how the war hurt her. It took so much away from her and her bright future, but what she seems to be the saddest about is losing ties to family. I know that most Asian families are very close to one another and it must have been devastating for her to lose those connections. I also thoroughly enjoyed “Sunset on Glacier Bay.” It was so much fun reading a poem conveying their love for nature because I love nature too! I think it’s really neat how significantly nature influences people. I also agree that it should be appreciated to the fullest extent.

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juliekimble Feb 19, 2015

Kathy, thanks for an excellent explication--I know it was difficult to discuss meter in another language. Since you and I worked it out in class as we listened to these poems in Vietnamese, I feel that speaking to the theme here is enough. I'm interested in the second poem especially, in that the poet uses Greek gods to help describe the splendor of nature! I know this was a challenge for you--now I want to add to that challenge for the next set of poems. I want you to pair two poems and describe why you paired them (opposite in tone, similar in topic, whatever you would like to do).

Here, still, waiting for you!

Here, still, waiting for you!

(an English version of 'Anh Vẫn Chờ Em')

As you drown in an illusion of life

Keep floating and sinking in those dark and colored night

Here, at the edge of my life

I have watched time slip by

How many seasons have come and gone

In the full and wane of that golden moon

Here, I awaited, and still, I wait for you

I, too, tried to share those illusions of yours

for I longed, even for a half of your loving heart - be mine!

Here, I have waited for your returning footsteps!

How many seasons have come and passed?

How many times the autumn leaves shed

In the golden and stillness of the last sunlight

Here, I, still, await your footsteps!

In the deafening of the ice-wintry nights

Can’t you also hear in the wind that whispered?

Your name, my love, your name whom I called

How many times has the breeze of spring passed?

Your youth and mine, the greenest of life,

will it last?

Or only the darkness of my shadow that casts

its loneliness and sadness as time passes

Yet, as the rhythm of life sustains

My longing for you still remains

In each and every beat of an untainted heart

My love for you – not an illusion - will last!

Nhật Thụy Vi

May 2015

(thanks Anastasia W. for helping with editing)

Hoàng Hôn Trên Glacier Bay

Hoàng Hôn Trên Glacier Bay

Ôi biển!

Kìa băng sơn và mặt trời chập chùng trên sóng

Ánh hào quang quyện khói nhạt cùng mây

Màu hồng cam ửng nước bạc đang trôi

Từng gợn sóng, mỹ miều đường cong mỹ nữ

Ta hấp tấp, ta xôn xao  bấu giữ

Thời gian ơi chỉ có một ngần này

Thần thiên nhiên, thần núi, thần mặt trời

Cho một phút, một giây này bất tử

Cho ta đổi một đời dài cằn cỗi

Nhận một áng hồng sắp sửa chìm sâu

Ôi! Nhưng sao lòng run rẫy xiết bao

Ta ngần ngại nên hồng chìm dưới  sóng.

Vi Wickham

June 2013

English Version

Sunset on Glacier Bay

Oh! The ocean

Where I see the ice mountain’s shadow playing with sunlight

Dancing on the waves in small, elegant steps

A vision of pinks and oranges with innumerable shades of subtly Magnificently entwined and released

On the silvery waves where the maiden’s form of distance passed

Is created by the curves & lines of ancient Greek goddesses

Nature's beauty has overflowed

And my eyes embrace all and everything they can reach

Until I close my eyes and I listen to my heartbeat

It quivers with the yearning of being embraced

Time stands still, here, now, at this moment

Oh! God of nature, mountains, and god of oceans

Here, my long and unworthy life I'd trade

For a pure ray of the light my hands long to reach

To be part of, to be dissolved in,

But retreating away, the golden light follows its waves,

And dives off into its depth

Yet still, thoughts in my heart linger,

with trembling and hesitancy in every grasping beat!

Vi

Thanks Staci for her help editing English version

https://kimblekorner.wikispaces.com/Nhat+Thuy+Vi

Commentary by Kathy Ho 2/22/2015

This poem is about the brilliance and splendor of nature. The narrator is praising nature in all its glory, this one specifically, a sunset on Glacier Bay. To the narrator, every aspect of nature is alive from the mountain’s shadow playing with the sunlight of the setting sun to the waves who take the form of a woman whose beauty can only have been created by goddesses. It is unmistakable that the narrator is overwhelmed by the beauty of what they are witnessing and that the narrator is willing to be overtaken by this beauteous scene. They embrace the tremendous beauty of nature and submit to its awesome power. In the Vietnamese culture, nature has an immense influence on the people, with the ability to leave many afflated. There is so little opportunity to appreciate beauty in the world that when beauty is presented to you, you must appreciate it to the fullest extent. This is firmly expressed in Vi’s poem when she wrote that the moment of the sunset was immortal and forever erect. Also firmly expressed in the poem is the idea that the beauty of nature is immortal. Vi’s writes of how, even though the moment of the sunset is gone, the effect of the beauty they had just witnessed still lingers in their hearts and in every heartbeat. Vi is showing the entrapping ability of beauteous nature through this. This shows how beauty never escapes their heart and that they are willfully forever ensnared by its power.

"Sunset on Glacier Bay" Commentary - by Lauren

lauren0g Feb 22, 2015

This is an exceptionally charming poem that seems to flow very smoothly in both languages (although I'm taking a guess on the Vietnamese; will you read it to me sometime?). I feel as if you have grasped the nature of the poem very strongly, and I agree with several of your points. The detail provide by Vi is very beautiful, and her imagery paints a beautiful picture of the actual sunset on Glacier Bay in the first stanza, waiting until the last two lines to really bring it down to earth and focus on herself for a small sliver of this poem. The second stanza is a mix of the two, reflecting on her own self and the nature of what she wants to become: a beam of light, so potent and powerful, yet a single silk thread in this masterpiece of nature. Another notable element about this poem that I feel you missed is the fact that the poem itself has a steady but irregular beat to it, like the heart beat that the speaker of the poem mentioned. It adds a sort of trembling curiosity to the poem, like she is completely and totally overwhelmed by the beauty of nature in this scene, ensnaring her senses and feelings about this encounter with nature. These points are incredibly important, especially with the fact that the speaker is willing to give her whole being to become a piece of this slice of nature, leaving the reader with her sense of curiosity and wonder.

Commentary by Elizabeth Hwang

Elizabeth_Hwang Feb 22, 2015

I think it’s really amazing how you were able to do your poetry project using Vietnamese poems. Even though our poems are from different countries, I can still imagine that it was challenging to interpret the Vietnamese culture and figurative language. The “Scars of War” used beautiful imagery and your explanation really clarified it. My favorite line is, “It would have stopped if each leaf in this vast

jungle hold those droplets of tears.” I further saw how the author felt when she shared the number of tears shed and how there were so many that all of the leaves would have to capture the droplets. She clearly shows how the war hurt her. It took so much away from her and her bright future, but what she seems to be the saddest about is losing ties to family. I know that most Asian families are very close to one another and it must have been devastating for her to lose those connections. I also thoroughly enjoyed “Sunset on Glacier Bay.” It was so much fun reading a poem conveying their love for nature because I love nature too! I think it’s really neat how significantly nature influences people. I also agree that it should be appreciated to the fullest extent.

Wiki Post 1: from Mrs. Kimble

juliekimble Feb 19, 2015

Kathy, thanks for an excellent explication--I know it was difficult to discuss meter in another language. Since you and I worked it out in class as we listened to these poems in Vietnamese, I feel that speaking to the theme here is enough. I'm interested in the second poem especially, in that the poet uses Greek gods to help describe the splendor of nature! I know this was a challenge for you--now I want to add to that challenge for the next set of poems. I want you to pair two poems and describe why you paired them (opposite in tone, similar in topic, whatever you would like to do).

Cùng Anh Bên Dòng Danube

Cùng Anh Bên Dòng Danube

Danube, ôi! Danube!

Em theo anh trở về dòng Danube

Ngắm hai bên bờ nước cuộn chảy quanh

Một dòng xanh vời-vẽ bao tình

Nung mộng ước và bao nhiêu ảo ảnh!

Sáng cùng ngắm sông soi mình lấp lánh

Bóng lâu đái ẩn hiện  giữa trời xa

Từ thềm cao, em nhìn suốt dòng sâu

Hai bóng nhỏ,  một tình yêu quấn quit

Nắm lấy tay,  giữa chiều mưa mờ mịt

Dù anh che vẫn ướt cả mái đầu

Mắt yêu thương nồng thắm đổi trao nhau

Em đã thấy – anh -  một dòng sông tình ái!

Bên sông đó, sao em còn tìm mãi

Ai, người xưa,  giặt áo lụa-tơ-phai?

Để nhạc lòng rung mãi đến hôm nay

Như kiếp trước, đời sau, mình hò hẹn!

Rồi đêm khuya,  trăng vàng soi trên bến

Lấp lánh xa,  nước ẩn bạc giòng êm

Lòng chùng theo buốt giá của trời đêm

Em đã thấy, một giòng xanh, nước biếc!

Vì màu sắc -  là lòng ta mơ ước

Nước cuộn dòng, sông vẫn chảy lặng im

Dù tình yêu đang ngui ngút trong em

Danube vẫn lượn lờ , đẩy đưa,  con nước!

Danube ơi! Danube!

Tiếng nhạc mơ hồ,  giòng xanh,  thuở trước

Em nghe êm như vòng xiết quanh lưng

Chợt bước chân  theo điệu nhạc rưng rưng

Em khép mắt - để  nghe tình luân vũ!

Có phải,  anh đưa em vế chốn cũ

Một bờ sông, nghìn tiếng vọng yêu đương

Đễ thơ anh hòa khói-quyện-mù-sương

Hòa tiếng nhạc trong dòng xanh nước cuộn

Có phải,  anh trao em bao ước muốn

Một khối tinh miên viễn đến nghìn thu

Em lòng chùng như tiếng nói dòng sâu

Tình-miên-viễn!   sông nghe em khấn nguyện!

Ôi! Danube! dòng sông tình-lưu-luyến

Chảy nghìn năm hát mãi một lời ru

Một giòng êm,  mang tình suốt muôn thu

Làm giao động – cả lòng em xao xuyến !

Nhật Thụy Vi

May 2015

Tình Yêu Khôn Nguôi

Tinh Yêu Khôn Nguôi

Tình Yêu Khôn Nguôi

Đến rồi đi, những mùa thu ngóng đợi

Những đông tàn gom buốt giá về đêm

Những xuân nồng đưa bước giấc mơ êm

Anh, trong mộng, ru em từng giấc ngủ

Những xuyến xao, những bồi hồi, hờn dỗi

Anh cuộn tròn vòng tình ái trao em

Mắt môi nào thương nhớ lại đẩy  thêm

Ngày với tháng, thời gian không còn nghĩa

Khi tiếng hát  vọng cao miền hoang dã

Đã gọi em từ cuối cõi trời xa

Lời thơ anh, nguồn suối đỗ chan hòa

Anh  gieo xuống giọt ân  tình lóng lánh!

Tình khôn nguôi, đượm tim em đắm thắm

Mùa thu này, hay thu nữa nhớ thương

Lá thu vàng -  vẫn từng chiếc,  vấn vương

Trăm năm nữa, nghìn năm sau vẫn thế!

Tình khôn nguôi - dù cuộc đời dâu bể

Dù bao nhiêu mùa đỗ-lá-vàng-phai

Dù bao lần em lạc bước đường dài

Tình soi bóng,  dắt dìu em  lối cũ !

Tình khôn nguôi – đậm trang thơ  tình sử

Vẫn nhiều phen mực loang, đọng, sầu tư

Vẫn nhiều đêm,  đèn đối bóng trời khuya

Soi lòng thấy thiết-thê bao nỗi nhớ!

Tình khôn nguôi – tình quyện hòa trong gió

Thơm lừng hương -  bập bùng theo hơi thở

Tình anh trao vào  tim em mở ngỏ

Tình dạt dào, như thác đổ, khôn nguôi!

Nhật Thụy Vi

Norman

11/2014

'Yêu, Một Vần Sinh-Tử'

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Yêu, một vần sinh tử

Ngoài kia sương dày dặc

Gió hiu lạnh lòng ai

Mắt buồn như trông ngóng

Dải mộ buồn phôi phai

Chừng tiếng ai trong gió

Như sáo diều mê say

Luồng quanh ngôi mộ cổ

Hay tiếng hờn đêm nay?

Ô kìa, sao im bặt

Bóng dáng nàng lung linh

Mờ mờ trong sương nhạt

Tuyệt mỹ một bóng hình!

Trăng vàng treo ngọn cỏ

Nắm níu lấy bàn tay

Tóc thơm lừng hương lạ

Từ đâu nàng tới đây?

Ôi, lòng chàng mê đắm

Ôi, tim nàng ngất ngây

Cùng nhau ta song bước

Từng đêm trăng trải đầy

Sách đèn treo song cửa

Sáo diều vươn ngọn cây

Trần gian thênh thang mở

Tiên cảnh với tầm tay

Mãi như vầy nàng nhé

Mãi thế này chàng ơi

Không sâu lòng mộ tối

Không cạn duyên trần ai

Tay hoa chàng đậm nét

Cung sáo nàng nâng cao

Trăng nghiêng đầu chứng giám

Sinh-tử một vần thôi!

Nhật Thụy Vi

Jan 2015

(cảm tác theo ‘Sương Khói’ của Thadée Thai Quang Đáng)